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雅思写作向来是令咱们头疼的疑问，有时候觉得自个写得很不错，但是得分却很低，本文中，新东方在线于思靓教师将联系考生作文为咱们详解雅思作文窍门。

　　咱们现在所看到的这篇小作文选自C6T2，同别的考官范文不一样，这篇文章出自考生之手。详细这篇考生的作文得了几分咱们先卖个关子，假设你是雅思考官，依照写作评分的四大项规范， 你会给他打几分呢?

　　The table below gives information about changes in modes of travel in England between 1985 and 2000.

　　In 2000 the most preferred mode of travel is by car with 4, 806 people. There's a noticeable decrease in public transportation locally where it dropped from 429 people in 1985 to 274 people in 2000. However the long distance bus rides is much more preferred by people as its figures are more than doubled in the last 15 years. People who chose to walk or cycle are decreased slightly in 2000. Which probably made people to take the take the train more often. There's a significant increase in the numbers of people who travelled by train. It jumped from 289 in 1985 to 366 in 2000. This makes the train second popular mode of transportation. The biggest leap in the chart is the increase of taxi users who are tripled in 2000 with 42 people. Where it was only 13 in 1985

　　Apart from all this modes of travel, there are some more different types of travel as well of course. Number of people choosing different modes of travel is rapidly increased from 450 to 585 in 2000.

　　咱们先从客观地从考官的评分视点来评判下这篇文章。

　　首先从文章的内容上来看，辛达雅思代报考生确实从趋势视点描绘了数据改变，但描绘逻辑紊乱。初步描绘了car，local bus 及 long distance bus。Car的数据从头到尾都是最大的，先描绘也毋庸置疑，但local bus 和 long distance bus，改变数据规划不多，一同改变趋势也不相同，放在一同描绘没有意义。其次，此文没有描绘表格中的总量这一数据，这也是其失分的因素。

　　再来看下这篇文章数字后所带的单位，考生的作文中带的是people， 但细心审题后咱们会发现，这篇作文的真实单位实践是miles，通篇文章对单位的了解都是过错的。

　　接下来咱们来看构造，通篇文章分红两段。考官习作中有分红三段、四段及五段的小作文的比如，但两段的肯定没有。一同，文章开篇直接就描绘了最大数据，缺少了最初段的引进，结尾段也并不是考官所期望看到的总结性信息。

　　不过从词汇视点来看， 文章代词及连词运用较好。

　　a. However the long distance bus rides is much more preferred by people as its figures are more than doubled in the last 15 years. Its指代long distance bus ride。

　　b. It jumped from 289 in 1985 to 366 in 2000. It指代the number of people who travelled by train.

　　c. This makes the train second popular mode of transportation. This 指代上一句话。

　　从语法视点来看，文章细微疑问较多。

　　a. 时态： 数据改变时刻为1985-2000， 为通常曩昔， 考生采用的为通常现在。

　　b. 主谓共同： However the long distance bus rides is much more preferred by people as its figures are more than doubled in the last 15 years. 主语复数， 谓语动词奇数， 主谓不共同。

　　c. 名词单复数： There's a significant increase in the numbers of people who travelled by train. Number应为奇数。

　　d. 被动语态： as its figures are more than doubled in the last 15 years. People who chose to walk or cycle are decreased slightly in 2000. Number of people choosing different modes of travel is rapidly increased from 450 to 585 in 2000. 这三个语句的动词应当全部改为自动语态。

　　这么的作文究竟能够得几分呢，咱们来看下考官评语，实践同咱们刚刚剖析时给出的要害点是共同的。

　　This is an answer written by a candidate who achieved a Band 6 score. Here is the examiner's comment:

　　This answer does not introduce the information in the table, nor does it report it accurately. The figures are misinterpreted as representing the number of people rather than the average number of miles travelled per person per year. Consequently the information about the increase in total travel is simply not mentioned, so not all key information is covered. There is an attempt to summarize trends in the figures, but the reader cannot get a clear overall picture of the information because of the fundamental confusion.

　　Nevertheless, the information is organized and the writing flows quite well because of good use of referencing and other connectors, but there are occasional errors in these and the links between ideas are slightly confusing at times.

　　The strong feature in this answer is the range of vocabulary which is used with some flexibility and good control. A good range of structures is also used, but there are still some fairly basic mistakes, such as in the choice of tense, subject/verb agreement and inappropriate use of the passive.

　　当然咱们剖析这篇考生习作的最终意图不是想通知咱们6分的作文过错百出，辛达雅思代报是期望同学们能够取长补短，像这篇作文考生所呈现的基本疑问，如时态、单位、语态等在你的作文中要防止呈现，像考官特别垂青的他的语句多样性的运用要多加学习。最终期待咱们能拿到抱负的分数。