打造雅思高分大作文的三大精髓(三)


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       c.由特别到一般摆放(specific-to-general arrangement)


  I do not understand why people confuse my Siamese cat, Prissy, with the one I had several years ago, Henry. The two cats are only alike in 

breed. Prissy, a quiet, feminine feline, loves me dearly but not possessively. She likes to keep her distance from people, exert her independence 

and is never so rude as to beg, lick, or sniff unceremoniously. Her usual posture is sitting upright, eyes closed, perfectly still. Prissy is a very proper

 cat. Henry, on the other hand, loved me dearly but possessively. He was my shadow from morning till night. He expected me to constantly 

entertain him. Henry never cared who saw him do anything, whether it was decorous or not, and he usually offended my friends in some way. The 

cat made himself quite comfortable, on the top of the television, across stranger's feet or laps, in beds, drawers, sacks, closets, or nooks. The 

difference between them is imperceptible to strangers.


  本段的主题句是段首句,它仅提出一个问题:为什么两只猫会被搞混。然后对两者进行比较,末句才下结论。

  2)形连


  行文的逻辑性常常要靠适当的转化词语及其他手段来完成。和辛达雅思代报小编读下面这一段文字并找出文中用以承上启下的词语:


  Walter's goal in life was to become a successful surgeon. First, though, he had to get through high school, so he concentrated all his efforts on

 his studies --- in particular, biology, chemistry, and math. Because he worked constantly on these subjects, Walter became proficient in them; 

however, Walter forgot that he needed to master other subjects besides those he had chosen. As a result, during his junior year of high school, 

Walter failed both English and Latin. Consequently, he had to repeat these subjects and he was almost unable to graduate on schedule. Finally, on 

June 6, Walter achieved the first step toward realizing his goal.


  本文中起承上启下的词语有两种,一种是转化词语(transitional words or phrases),另一种是起转化效果的其他衔接手段(linking devices)。前者依次有:

first, though, so, in particular, and, because, however, besides, as a result, both…and, consequently, and, finally.后者依次是:he, he, his, his, he, 

these, them, he, those, his, he, these, his.本段中共有词汇105个,所运用的转化词语及其他衔接用语共26个词,约占该段总词汇量的四分之一。由此可见,

把握好transitions不仅对行文的流通(smoothness)有利,而且对于学生在规则时刻内写足所要求的字数也是不无优点的。


  一个阶段里假如没有transitions也就很难有coherence了.咱们看下面一个例子:


  Speaking and writing are different in many ways. Speech depends on sounds. Writing uses written symbols. Speech developed about 500 000 

years ago. Written language is a recent development. It was invented only about six thousand years ago. Speech is usually informal. The word 

choice of writing is often relatively formal. Pronunciation and accent often tell where the speaker is from. Pronunciation and accent are ignored in 

writing. A standard diction and spelling system prevails in the written language of most countries. Speech relies on gesture, loudness, and rise and

fall of the voice. Writing lacks gesture, loudness and the rise and fall of the voice. Careful speakers and writers are aware of the differences.


  本段中除了第6句开头呈现一个起过渡效果的"it"之外,没有运用其他的过渡词语.这样,文中呈现许多重复的词语,全段读起来也显得生硬而不自然。假如

加上必要的过渡词语来润饰的话,这一段就成了下面一个流通连接的阶段:


  Speaking and writing are different in many ways. Speech depends on sounds; writing, on the other hand, uses written symbols. Speech was 

developed about 500 000 years ago, but written language is a recent development, invented only about six thousand years ago. Speech is usually 

informal, while the word choice of writing, by contrast, is often relatively formal. Although pronunciation and accent often tell where the speaker is

from, they are ignored in wiring because a standard diction and spelling system prevails in most countries. Speech relies on gesture, loudness, and

 the rise and fall of the voice, but writing lacks these features. Careful speakers and writers are aware of the differences.


  4.有损连接性的几种情况:


  考生在写作中经常呈现下面几种过错:


  1)不必要的改动时态,例子:


  In the movie, Robert Redford was a spy. He goes to his office where he found everybody dead. Other spies wanted to kill him, so he takes 

refuge with Julie Christie. At her house, he had waited for the heat to die down, but they come after him anyway.


  2)不必要的改动单复数,例子:


  Everybody looks for satisfaction in his life. They want to be happy. But if he seeks only pleasure in the short run, the person will soon run out 

of pleasure and life will catch up to him. They need to pursue the deeper pleasure of satisfaction in work and in relationships.


  3)不必要的改动人称,例子:


  Now more than ever, parents need to be in touch with their children's activities because modern life has the tendency to cause cleavages in 

the family. You need to arrange family like it so that family members will do things together and know one another. You need to give up isolated 

pleasures of your own and realize that parents have a set of obligations to sponsor togetherness and therefore sponsor knowledge.


  因此写作中,必定要留意时态,人称以及数的改变是否正确,要留意保持一致。


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