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In many countries, the number of elderly people is increasing fast. To whatextent do the disadvantages outweigh the advantages?

　　Nowadays, owning to the improvement of living condition(这儿习惯用复数), peoplecan live much longer than before, which gives rise to the fast increasing numberof elderly people. Some hold that this situation will result in a series ofproblems, such as social burden, population expansion and so on. While othersinsist that it agrees the development of modern society and brings manyadvantages. For my part, I take the latter side with(用for) the followingreasons: (74words)

　　点评：最初稍微写的有点长，不过内容写的还不错。归于经过剖析两种不一样观念，最终论述自个观念的写法。(此种写法在雅思大作文的榜首段对比常见)

　　美中不足的是倒数第二句的过错对比显着!while是个连词，应当衔接语句与语句，所以这儿前面不应当是句号。后边agree是不及物动词，不能直接加宾语。

　　Firstly, elder people(一瞬间elderly people,一瞬间又elder people，这不是自相矛盾么!!!) arethe fortune of our society. They have enough experiences and capabilities whichare badly lacked and needed for our youth when dealing with all sorts ofproblems, they can still do well in their jobs. Especially(前面应当用逗号，然后这儿小写) insome professions, such as teacher, doctor, scientist and so on, sometimes(前面应当用句号，然后这儿大写)age means the authority and ability. When you see a doctor, doyou prefer an elderly doctor with grey hair or a youth without mustache?(77words)

　　Secondly, elder people(同上) are the happiness of our society. Increasingnumber of elderly people is also the embodiment of our improving living quality,which shows our society run(应当第三人称奇数)to the right and healthy direction,we(前面句号，这儿大写) have more chance and time to serve our elderly people, and it’sthe happiest time of all our life to accompany with(accompany是及物动词) our parents,grandparents and great grandparents. (63words)

　　Finally, elderly people are the lubricant of our society. They have goodtemper and enough patients(应当是patience吧) to do anything, they can help us tointercede(它是不及物动词，并且首要用人作宾语) social disputes, and they make our society muchmore harmonious which(前面最佳有个逗号)makes for the construction of harmonioussociety.(43words)

　　雅思代报正文段综合点评：此篇是典型的5段式作文的写作，正文段构思出三个分论点来证实自个的观念，确实在构思上花了不少心思。可是，这儿雅思代报想提的是，仍是两方面都剖析一下会对比好一点。格外这篇文章是问长处多仍是缺陷多，那么最佳是缺陷讲一个，然后长处再讲两个。外国人喜爱这么的辩证剖析。

　　其次，总的来说，作者的言语仍是挺流通的。可是好像标点有问题，该用句号的时分用逗号，改用逗号的时分用句号，这个也要扣分的!

　　From mentioned above, the advantages of increasing number of elderly peopleare obvious more than it disadvantages(典型的Chinese English.应当说there are obviouslymore advantages than disadvantages.). Elderly people are not the burden of oursociety but the source of fortune, happiness and harmony of oursociety.(37words)

　　全文总评：

　　虽然总的来说言语水平仍是很不错的，内容也写得很充分，但缺陷是言语方面仍是不够细腻。此文7分。