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【学生习作节选】
Nowadays, a increasing number of people concerned about the enhancement of public services. However, whether the government should allocate fund to public services other than waste money on arts is controversial issue. In my view, public service are vital to our life, but spending money on arts is definitely not just waste money.
不看不知道,一看吓一跳!这短短3句话共53词的开头段里,布满着8处语法过错,这在雅思写作评分标准中的 “语法准确性”(Grammatical Range and Accuracy)一条上天然会大打折扣。
下面辛达雅思代报小编就带我们挨个来八一八这些看似微小,但却决定了雅思写作胜败的细节问题,也请各位烤鸭对号入座!
【细节一】冠词的运用
1. 原文:Nowadays, a increasing number ofpeople...
确诊:元音单词increasing前的不定冠词使用an而不是a。这样的过错在白话中不简单犯,但写到纸上时就简单忽视。所以说,写完的作文不只要重看,更要“重读”,才能凭借语感揪出这样的小过错。
修正:Nowadays, an increasing number ofpeople...
2. 原文:However, whether the government... on arts is controversial issue.
确诊:issue是可数名词,但这儿既没有用冠词又不是复数,显然是有问题的。
修正:However, whether the government... on arts is a controversial issue.
【细节二】名词单复数
3. 原文:However, whether the government should allocate fund to public services ...
确诊:fund表明政府拨款的“资金”,此处应该运用复数,表明多笔拨款。
修正:However,whether the government should allocate funds topublic services ...
4. 原文:In my view, public service are vitalto our life, but...
确诊:语句主语public service与谓语are不一致,主语是奇数,而谓语是复数用法。此处public services泛指“公共服务”,使用复数。
修正:In my view, public services are vitalto our life, but...
【细节三】动词词组用法
5. 原文:Nowadays, [an] increasing number of people concernedabout the enhancement of public services.
确诊:动词词组be concernedabout...表明“对……重视”。但这句话中运用时漏掉了be动词,导致整个语句语法过错。
修正:Nowadays,[an] increasing number of people are concerned about the enhancement of public services.
*注:中括号内单词[an]表明已在原文中修正的过错。下同。
【细节四】近似用法混淆
6. 原文:However, whether the government should allocate fund to publicservices other than waste...
确诊:考生本来想用的应该是rather than,表明“而不是”,却过错地写成了方式类似的other than,表明“除了……之外”,整句话的意思就改变了。
修正:However,whether the government should allocate fund to public services rather than waste...
【细节五】非谓语动词用法
7. 原文:However, whether... to public services [rather] than waste money on arts is...
确诊:ratherthan是介词,后面可接名词或动名词方式,但此处考生过错地接了动词原形。
修正:However,whether... to public services [rather] than wasting money on arts is...
8. 原文:In my view... but spending money on arts is definitely not just waste money.
确诊:考生想表达“在艺术上投资绝不只仅是糟蹋金钱”,但却过错地用动词原形waste作表语,暴露了基本功不扎实的问题
修正:In myview... but spending money on arts is definitely not just wasting money.
*注:除了动名词之外,其他几种非谓语动词——动词不定式、现在分词、过去分词等,也是写作中的重头戏。假如用得好天然锦上添花,但这些往往也是最简单犯错的部分。
【总结】
看完以上过错分析,是不是深刻领会到了“The devil is in the details”这句话的内涵?
所谓细节决定胜败。要想在雅思写作中收成高分,除了玩转各种酷炫的观念和行文技巧,更要留心语法细节,不要让这些小过错毁了你的雅思写作!
小编找到的是作者的一些见解,希望可以为考生们寻找到最好得分方式,也希望对大家有所帮助。最后,希望广大考生们在备考过程中提升自己的语言水平,取得更好的成绩。
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