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辛达雅思代报小编带大家看看下面这个小作文的最初段，看似行文流水，实则欲哭无泪。

　　As can be seen from the table chart, it gives us the percentage of national consumer experience by category in 2002 in five different countries.

　　谈及套句，小作文中“As can be seen from…”曾被列为小作文必备佳句，而孰不知此句虽好，但native speaker 常把它放在主体阶段最初句。若论行文习气，真实勉强。

　　再者，“table chart”必会让考官在批卷的疲劳中会心一笑。但是烤鸭们，不知啊，你让他笑，他却让你人比黄花瘦，虽然他是那样的爱你。此短语翻译成中文叫“表格图”，考生自是觉得挺有中国风的感觉。但考官会认为是“这table便是表格，也便是图的一种，还后边要是再加一chart，再来一图。实为“black sheep 一族”啊!南部陈更要翻译成“表格图图”?真实是具有喜感啊!再论“us”一词，感觉却是亲民派系， 考官考生一家人啊。

　　但是，雅思写作，半学术文体，这词总有点较为随意。所以，宁为被迫，隐去施动者，换成it can be seen ,或是it represents that 等句，或许会更好点。考生最无辜的当地便是下面的这个percentage。咱们都知道，衣服表格不可能只有全图一个数据，又怎会忘记名词单复数的问题呢?

　　最终那个“in 2002 in five different countries”，感觉起来好似是信息满满，不知道是否也是决心满满?语法老师告知咱们：当语句中一起有地址状语和时刻状语时,一般要把地址状语放在时刻状语之前 。要知道，不走寻常路，那是考官的作风。考生要是也这样做，哭泣大于微笑。

　　根据上述阶段的分析，不知道同学们是否也会有所收获?其实最初段，自是不用非得写的那叫一个倾国倾城。简略大方，信息全面，可以统领全文，那就最好。你，懂得了吗?

　　雅思作文这样批，你懂的---系列二

　　People have, in recent years, shown concern on the dire consequences of global warming and air pollution. Some people suggest that we should limit are travel (traveling) instead of car use. It seems to me that the objection against air travel is based on incorrect facts and stereotypes. (The) Vehicle is an integral segment of urban industrial civilization, mirroring contemporary life, in its best and unrest aspects.

　　Just as machinery is integral to industrialization, air is central to world economy. (有逻辑关系吗?)Air travels make it possible for people to move around the world freely and quickly.

　　Today, the tips can be completed in a matter of hours. One can attend a meeting in Pairs and dinner in New York the same day. There is a growing recognition that air travels have several advantages, while(连接词运用有误，改成meanwhile)it can (补上主语) ensures(删掉s)the growth of modern business such as international tourism, transportation and express delivery ,etc.

　　Therefore, limiting air travel itself is a grave mistake ，that(非限制从句引导词改成which)would be a severe blow to these industries and may even damage world economy.

小编找到的是作者的一些见解，希望可以为考生们寻找到最好得分方式，也希望对大家有所帮助。最后，希望广大考生们在备考过程中提升自己的语言水平，取得更好的成绩。

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