实例分析雅思写作中的经典过错


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       一. 不一致(disagreements)

  所谓不一致不光指主谓不一致,它还包含了数的不一致 时态不一致及代词不一 致等.

  例1. when one have money ,he can do what he want to .

  (人一旦有了钱,他就能想干什么就干什么.)

  分析:one是奇数第三人称,因而本句的have应改为has ;同理,want应改为wants.本句是典型的主谓不一致.

  改为: once one has money ,he can do what he wants (to do)

  二. 修饰语错位(misplaced modifiers)

  英语与汉语不同,同一个修饰语置于语句不同的方位,语句的意义可能引起改变.关于这一点中国学生往往没有引起足够的重视,因而造成了不必要的误解.  例1. i believe i can do it well and i will better know the world outside the campus.

  分析:better方位不妥,应置于句末.

  三. 语句不完好(sentence fragments)

  在白话中,外交双方可凭借手势口气上下文等,不完好的语句完全能够被了解.但是书面语就不同了,语句结构不完好会令意思表达不清,这种状况常常发作在主句写完以后,笔者又想加些弥补阐明时发作.

  例1. there are many ways to know the society. for example by tv ,radio ,newspaper and so on .

  分析:本句后半部分"for example by tv ,radio ,newspaper and so on .”不是一个完好的语句,仅为一些不连贯的词语,不能独立成句.

  改为:there are many ways to know society ,for example ,by tv ,radio ,and newspaper.

  四. 悬垂修饰语(dangling modifiers)

  所谓悬垂修饰语是指句首的短语与后边语句的逻辑联系紊乱不清.例如:at the age of ten, my grandfather died. 这句中"at the age of ten"只点出十岁时,但没有阐明” 谁”十岁时.按一般推理不可能是my grandfather, 假如咱们把这个悬垂修饰语改清晰一点,全句就不那么费解了.

  改为:

  when i was ten, my grandfather died.

  例1. to do well in college, good grades are essential.

  分析:句中不定式短语 “to do well in college” 的逻辑主语不清楚.

  改为:

  to do well in college, a student needs good grades.

      五. 词性误用(misuse of parts of speech)

  “词性误用”常表现为:介词当动词用;形容词当副词用;名词当动词用等.

  例1. none can negative the importance of money.

  分析:negative 系形容词,误作动词。

  改为:

  none can deny the importance of money.

  六. 指代不清(ambiguous reference of pronouns)

  指代不清主要讲的是代词与被指代的人或物联系不清,或许先后所用的代词不一致。试看下面这一句:

  mary was friendly to my sister because she wanted her to be her bridesmaid.

  (玛丽和我姐姐很要好,由于她要她做她的伴娘。)

  读完上面这一句话,读者无法清晰地判别两位姑娘中谁将成婚,谁将当伴娘。假如咱们把易于引起误解的代词的所指目标加以清晰,意思就一望而知了。这个语句可改为:

  mary was friendly to my sister because she wanted my sister to be her bridesmaid.

  例1. and we can also know the society by serving it yourself.

  分析:句中人称代词we 和反身代词yourself指代不一致。改为:

  we can also know society by serving it ourselves.

  七. 不间断语句(run-on sentences)

  什么叫run-on sentence?请看下面的例句。

  例1. there are many ways we get to know the outside world.

  分析:这个语句包含了两层完好的意思:“there are many ways.” 以及“we get to know the outside world.”。简略地把它们连在一起就不妥当了。

  改为:

  there are many ways for us to learn about the outside world. 或:

  there are many ways through which we can become acquainted with the outside

  world

       八. 措词缺点(troubles in diction)

  diction 是指在特定的语句中怎么适当地选用词语的问题,囿于教育时刻急迫,教师平常在这方面花的时刻往往极端有限,影响了学生在写作中没有养成杰出的琢磨,酌量的习气。他们往往为所欲为,拿来就用。所以作文中用词不妥的过错举目皆是。

  例1. the increasing use of chemical obstacles in agriculture also makes pollution.

  (农业方面化学物质运用的不断添加也造成了污染。)

  分析:明显,考生把obstacles“妨碍”,“妨碍物”误作substance“物质”了。另外“the increasing use (不断添加的运用)” 应改为“abusive use (乱用)”。

  改为:

  the abusive use of chemical substances in agriculture also causes/leads to pollution.

  九. 负担(redundancy)

  言以简练为贵。写语句没有一个剩余的词;写阶段没有一个无必要的语句。能用单词的不必词组;能用词组的不必从句或语句。如:

  in spite of the fact that he is lazy, i like him.

  本句的“the fact that he is lazy”系同谓语从句,咱们依照上述“能用词组的不必从句”能够改为:in spite of his laziness, i like him.

  例1. for the people who are diligent and kind, money is just the thing to be used to buy the thing they need.

  分析:整个语句能够大大简化。

  改为:

  diligent, caring people use money only to buy what they need.

  十. 不连贯(incoherence)

  不连贯是指一个语句前言不对后语,或是结构上不畅通。这也是考生常犯的缺点。

  例1. the fresh water, it is the most important things of the earth.

  分析:the fresh water 与逗号后的it 不连贯。it 与things 在数方面不一致。

  改为:

  fresh water is the most important thing in the world.

  十一. 综合性言语过错(comprehensive misusage)

  所谓“综合性言语过错”,是指除了上述十种过错以外,还有比如时态,语态,标点符号,大小写等方面的过错。

  例1.today, money to everybody is very importance, our’s eat, cloth, live, go etc.




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